Watch out for These "Characters" in Your Writing

As you revise your work, BOLO (Be on the Lookout) for these “characters” that can slow your plot down or drag your story into the mundane.

The Sports Commentator - Look for places in your story where you do a lot of play-by-play action either in narrative or in dialogue. These are spot where you tell something and then something else, and then something else happened and then something else happened. Show the reader the action. Don’t be a commentator. There are other ways that you can move your story forward.

The Weather Person - It’s nice to know what is going on around your characters, but don’t interrupt the story to interject several paragraphs about the weather. Figure out ways to sprinkle it in without derailing the action.

The Collector - Look for sections in your writing where you do data dumps. You do not need to tell your reader everything at one time. These are usually long paragraphs with way too much information. Figure out ways to break it up and disperse it throughout the story. It’s too much for your reader, and it bogs down your pace.

Sgt. Friday - Look for spots where you list “Just the facts, ma’am” like Sgt. Friday in Dragnet. These are sentences where you describe everything about a character in one paragraph. It probably is important information to share, but not all at one time. Make sure you spread it out, so it doesn’t read like the facts on a police report. (In case you haven’t seen Dragnet: Almanac: Dragnet - YouTube.)

The Historian - Backstory is important to your work, especially if you write a series, but you don’t need to stop the action for a history lesson. Figure out ways to sprinkle in the information, one or two sentences at a time.

The SCUBA Diver - Details and descriptions are important as you introduce characters and new situations, but be careful not to dive too deep. You can sidetrack your readers easily when paragraphs get bogged down in the minutia.

Many times, I don’t notice these creeping in until I start revisions. My critique group and beta readers are really good a pointing out these problem areas. Your writing will be stronger if you can avoid these pesky characters.

Happy writing!